This is simply amazing. Obviously, not in the part that this is, in fact, a piece of suicidal fragmentation. Amazing due to the fact that your mind works like a college thesaurus. Your wording is absolutely amazing, your words themselves aren't ordinary, rather, aboriginal.

I can easily relate to this, and that's one of many things that makes this so great. You easily summed up a depression episode in poetry. Your similes and metaphors astound me, beyond words.

I like how you have the narrator's point of view, but that you also acknowledge other, "normal", people and their point of views on the depressed. That's good writing.

- KeKo